Elders say that life was better in past compared to life today. Do you think they are right or wrong based on your knowledge or experience?

Old
people
think that
the
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life
before was better than
life
now a days
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nowadays
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.
This
is because they were happier living in the
village
with
less
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fewer
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people
. I think, that they are correct because
life
in the
village
is
also
not the same.
First
of all,
life
before was doing all things together like
family
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a family
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. They all have to do work because there
was
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were
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no machines to help
this
was
good
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a good
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way for families to understand each other. If a farmer in the
village
in the past
need
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needed
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to make
harvest
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a harvest
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he depend on his sons to help him and they do work together and
live
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together.
This
life
totally changed today as we have
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a tractor
the tractor
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tractor
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tractors
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and
other machine
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another machine
other machines
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to do
job
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the job
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of 10
people
. So sons go to find other jobs and family not stay together and so the old
people
feel
life
today is not good like past.
Secondly
, there is more pollution problem everywhere because there is traffic.
This
is
main
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the main
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reason for
lot
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a lot
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of health
problem
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problems
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so
the
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old
people
don’t like
life
today. Most of the small
village
in eastern Europe has no farmers all are doing factory job
for example
and
this
factory is far so all have to take transport or take their car so it is making too much pollution everywhere. The old
people
not working in nature but in factor these days and so they get the feeling that
life
was better in past. To summarize, many old
people
like
the
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life
in the past and I think it is right because they are not happy working in
factory
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a factory
the factory
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or when
the
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their
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children go away to work.
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