Elders say that life was better in past compared to life today. Do you think they are right or wrong based on your knowledge or experience?
Old
people
think that the
Correct article usage
apply
life
before was better than life
now a days
. Correct the word
nowadays
This
is because they were happier living in the village
with less
Change the quantifier
fewer
people
. I think, that they are correct because life
in the village
is also
not the same.
First
of all, life
before was doing all things together like family
. They all have to do work because there Add an article
a family
was
no machines to help Change the verb form
were
this
was good
way for families to understand each other. If a farmer in the Add an article
a good
village
in the past need
to make Replace the word
needed
harvest
he depend on his sons to help him and they do work together and Correct article usage
a harvest
live
together. Wrong verb form
lived
This
life
totally changed today as we have Add an article
a tractor
the tractor
tractor
and Fix the agreement mistake
tractors
other machine
to do Change the wording
another machine
other machines
job
of 10 Add an article
the job
people
. So sons go to find other jobs and family not stay together and so the old people
feel life
today is not good like past.
Secondly
, there is more pollution problem everywhere because there is traffic. This
is main
reason for Add an article
the main
lot
of health Change the article
a lot
problem
so Fix the agreement mistake
problems
the
old Correct article usage
apply
people
don’t like life
today. Most of the small village
in eastern Europe has no farmers all are doing factory job for example
and this
factory is far so all have to take transport or take their car so it is making too much pollution everywhere. The old people
not working in nature but in factor these days and so they get the feeling that life
was better in past.
To summarize, many old people
like the
Correct article usage
apply
life
in the past and I think it is right because they are not happy working in factory
or when Add an article
a factory
the factory
the
children go away to work.Change the word
their
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
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