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Recently you bought an electronic gadget for home purpose. Your friend wants same gadget and needs your advice. • What is this gadget, • what do you think about it, • give advice about other alternatives your friend can buy.

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Dear Meet, Hope you and your family members are doing well. I am writing
this
 mail as you need some of
suggestions
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 on an electronic item hairdryer which I was bought and you
want
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towant
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 buy it same. By
last
 month on 18th
November
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,November
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 I
had
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bought
Ikonic
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an Ikonic
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 brand Hair-blower for me and my sisters. The product has
a
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the
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 highest 2500watt power capacity in
compare
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 to
rest
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the rest
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 of
brands
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the brands
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 as well as contains three
diffusors
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diffusers
 of various
shape
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shapes
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 and
size
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sizes
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.
Moreover
, It coasted me around
of
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Rs.7000.It works
wonder
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wonders
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 as in just 3 minutes all my wet hair
get
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gets
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 dry.
In addition
 to
that
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,that
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 it
also
 has a cooling air option so that my hair does not
over dry
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. As far as my experience is concerned I should say that the item works
excellent
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excellently
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.
Moreover
, it has a multipurpose you can use
it
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apply
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for
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to
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blow
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a blow
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 dry your hair,
make
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making
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 straight and curls using
their
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its
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 different attachments of it.
Lastly
, it comes under
warranty
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a warranty
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 of 2 years. Despite of above all good features if you don’t have
requirement
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a requirement
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of
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for
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 it on
your
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a
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 regular basis
than
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then
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 I should suggest you
to
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apply
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buy
Nova-blow
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a Nova-blow
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 dryer of 600
watt
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watts
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. It not only in
lower
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the lower
a lower
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 budget like just rupees 1000 but
also
 has
1 year
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1-year
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 guarantee. As you need
travel
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to travel
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 around the world for your business trip you can easily carry
in
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it in
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 your purse because of its compact size.
Furthermore
 it
easily
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is easily
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 available
on
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in
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 online stores with various
discounts
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discount
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 offers. Hope my suggestions would help you
out
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apply
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to select
best
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the best
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 product for you! Don’t forget to give my regards to your all near and ear
one
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ones
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. See you ! Yours lovely, Shree
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