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A good friend has just changed schools and is having difficulty fitting in and needs your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • make suggestions as to how they could make friends • suggest joining clubs, participating in school activities • give any extra general advice You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear...,

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Dear Rachel, I was excited to hear that you have enrolled at St. Xavier’s School, and I’m happy to help you make new friends. First of all, I would suggest you start by getting out of your comfort zone. I understand that you are naturally shy and introverted, but you need to put yourself out there so that people find you approachable. I would
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 suggest you enrol
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in the music club and the book club. I know you love singing and reading books, and
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 would be an amazing opportunity to connect with people who have similar interests
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 you. These clubs are present in the student centre on the second floor. I would recommend you enrol
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 these clubs as soon as possible since there are limited seats available. I had a fantastic time hosting activities for these clubs when I was a student at St. Xavier’s, and I believe you will enjoy being a part of
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 community as well. I would
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 recommend you connect on social media with other students who have similar interests
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 you.
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 way, you will be able to come across topics that you can start discussing with them. I’m quite confident you will be able to find new friends soon. Please have some faith in yourself and be patient. I look forward to hearing from you. Warmest regards, Krithi

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task response
Add one more small idea at the end, like asking about her first week, to make the letter feel more full.
coherence and cohesion
Use shorter and more clear links in some lines. This will make the flow even smoother.
coherence and cohesion
Try not to repeat 'I would suggest' and 'I would recommend' too many times. Use a few different ways to give advice.
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You answer all parts of the task with clear and useful advice.
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The tone is warm, kind, and right for a letter to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph has one main idea, so it is easy to follow.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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