Children today spend more time watching television than they did in the past. Describe some of the advantages and disadvantages of television for children.

Nowadays,
children
spend more
time
on
television
than did in the past as It
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became
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habitual
of
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every
children
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but It is increasing their obesity and they are not doing any physical activity at all. I believe that it is very much disadvantages for every
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. I explain the same in detail
in
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below. In past,
children
spent
a
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time
on
Television
for some
time
but today they spend more and more
time
on
Television
now. It is
negative
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impact on their health. If he
spend
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more
time
so he is sitting
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same
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place for a long
time
and eat
more
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a
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more
also
because he will face
issue
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of obesity because he is not doing any activity at that
time
and No physical activity
also
.
At
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the other side, They spend more
time
of
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Television
, he cannot do
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proper study
also
like not doing homework, playing properly,
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and no
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no
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not
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reading
also
. It will impact
to
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their result. they can get their
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result on
exam
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. they become lazy and
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don't
dont
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don't
consiractate on their study. It is
also
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issue
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in getting admission
on
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their
desire
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school and college
also
.
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, I believe that
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are many disadvantages
of
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children
to spend
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spending
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more and more
time
on
television
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational programs
  • diverse cultures
  • entertainment options
  • language skills
  • critical thinking
  • social awareness
  • shared experience
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • inappropriate content
  • academic performance
  • attention problems
  • social skills
  • commercial influence
  • addiction
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