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Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Some individuals believe that
subjects
 related to
art
 are extremely important for young learners at school, whereas others argue that
art
classes
 are just a waste of
students
' time. In my opinion, studying
art
 is important for kids for many reasons.
This
 essay will discuss both views. On the one hand, it is true that
art
subjects
such
 as painting, and music are related to talented
people
, so
this
 would be beneficial for children at school to study
art
 because it reinforces their creativity, discover their skills,
also
 it is enjoyable for them, as well as it is critical for them in the future.
For instance
, many schools in the UK teach different
art
subjects
 to pupils and a lot of
students
 loved painting and music
classes
.
On the other hand
,
people
 argue that learning
art
 is just a waste of some
students
' time, because many pupils are not good at
art
,
Hence
students
 will get bored during the class, for
this
 reason, many
people
 think that there are many
subjects
 are more significant than
art
 like sports and programming as well,
For example
, a survey conducted among
students
 from 50 schools in the USA, the results say that more than half of
students
 do not like
art
classes
. In conclusion, some
people
 think that teaching
art
at
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children is vital for many reasons, like discovering their talents, and
that is
 my view of point, while others believe that
art
classes
 are just a waste of some
students
' time.
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