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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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Some people said that it is good for young people to
work
 or
travel
 for a
year
 between finishing high school and starting university studies. Here is my opinion.
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work
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year
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between
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 finishing high school can improve the
ability
 to social life. Nowadays children are often spoilt,
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 means that children grow up without consideration for others and without
understanding
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an understanding
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 of where their life standards come from. Working for a
year
 may let them know how hard the
work
 is and how lucky they live in
this
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situation
situaction
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situation
 right now. It can
also
 improve the
ability
of working
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 in
the
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 group,
it
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 is a very important
ability
 when they get into
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university. While about
travel
, it can
makes
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they
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 relaxed and improve the
ability
of talking
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 with
the
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people they never meet before and knowing the different couture in
different
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a different
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 country.
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 the other hand,
work
 or
travel
 for a
year
 may let them forget the feeling of
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studying
studing
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studying
. It may
makes
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 them can not find their groove when they
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in to
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 the university. All in all, every coin has two
side
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.You can
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 with your parents.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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