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In some spend young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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Nowadays,
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the
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transportation
being
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 made much more convenient by the improvement of technology. An increasing number of young people tend to do some part-time jobs or go somewhere for a trip between graduating from high school and beginning
university
 life. From my perspective, I think
this
 phenomenon will bring both beneficial and harmful effects. The benefits are obvious. On the one hand, for those who choose to
work
 for a
year
,
they
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may
able
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 to gain some
working
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 experience which will help them to adapt to
the
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university
 life more easily.
For example
, if a person chose to
work
 in a restaurant, he need
do
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 learn how to cope with different kinds of things like breaking the dishes,
have
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conflict
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 with managers or
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. So that they will be unhurried when meeting the same kinds of things
in
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 the
university
.
On the other hand
, those who choose to travel around the world will get enough
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 after the hard
work
 of the three-
year
 high school life. Enjoying sceneries of different places or living with local people will be beneficial for
travelers
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 to have a better understanding of local culture.
This
 will bring benefits to those who choose history or tourism as their major.
However
, they will still be affected by some harmful impacts no matter
they
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 choose to
work
 or travel.
Firstly
, only doing
works
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 or
traveling
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 without learning any academic knowledge will let them forget
huge
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 amount of things they have learnt
at
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 high school.So it might be difficult for them to adapt to the intensity of learning and cause them to even flank in the test.
Secondly
, some of their peers may not go to
work
 or travel, which means they entered
university
 one
year
 earlier than them. They have more time to enhance their learning skills and do more
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 to increase their occupational opportunity. In
such
 a society
which
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 the unemployment rate shows an upward trend, it is much more difficult for those who have worked or
traveled
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 for a
year
 to find new jobs. In conclusion, it seems to me that working or
traveling
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 for a
year
 would bring both harmful and beneficial effects.
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