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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

#rubbish #governments #amount
Currently, a huge amount of
waste
 is generated by
the
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people
 all over the world, which is a serious threat to the environment.
This
 is due to the increase in
number
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a number
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 of single-use
plastic
 which is not bio-
degradeable
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degradable
.
Government
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The government
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 needs to ban
this
 type of
plastic
 and should focus on creating awareness among the public and start promoting
products
 which are sustainable. Nowadays,
Plastic
waste
 is becoming an important issue for the
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government
governments
goverments
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government
 because of its
detoriating
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deteriorating
 effects on the environment as well as on
economy
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the economy
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. Single-use
plastic
 is a very cheap commodity and is inexpensive to produce and because of that
people
 are using it a lot.
For example
, a recent study has shown that we use about a million
ton
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 of
plastic
 every month which cannot be recycled. So, we either have to dump it in the landfill or in the sea. Throwing
non-
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non-recyclable
recycleable
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recyclable
waste
 in the ocean is a danger to
the
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marine life and can affect the natural food chain as
lot
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 of
the
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sea creatures are dying due to the ingestion of
this
 rubbish. As
this
 is
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becoming
beoming
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becoming
 a threat to the existence of marine animals,
government
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the government
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 should ban
this type
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these types
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 of
products
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product
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 and create awareness regarding
this
 issue among the
people
. A majority of
the
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people
 are now on social media which can be a great platform to create awareness about using
recycleable
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recyclable
products
 or compostable goods.
For example
, In India, a lot of
the
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people
 are now using plates made from leaves of the banyan tree and spoons made from wood which is
evnvironment
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environment
-friendly. In
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Conclusion
Conslusion
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conclusion
, reducing
plastic
waste
 is
global
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a global
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 challenge and
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governments
government
goverments
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governments
 across the world
,
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needs
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need
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 to promote more sustainable
products
 in order to reduce
waste
 coming from
one-time use
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one-time-use
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 plastics.
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