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Although, more and more people read news on the internet, newspaper will remian the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is a modern trend, in which
people
 prefer to have access to the
news
 from the
internet
, while elderly
people
 believe that paper-based is better. In my opinion, technology has changed our life and facilitated many things
such
 as reading the
news
 wherever and whenever you want. So, I believe that reading
news
 online can be the easiest way to stay updated and fresh
announcement
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announcements
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.
First
 and
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foremost
for most
formost
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foremost
,
internet
news
provide
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provides
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 easy access to information. Breaking that down
further
, now in
this
 speedy
world
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people
 tend to utilize the
easy
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 accessible
news
 in order to save
their
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apply
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time and effort.
For example
, if the country prevents
people
 to get outside for some
reasons
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reason
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such
 as war or viruses, in
this
case
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 the person who can't use the
internet
 or
not
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is not
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 into the
habits
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habit
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 of checking
news
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the news
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 online will not know that he must stay at home.
Secondly
,
internet
news
 can be much
reliable
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more reliable
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 because of the diversity of sources. To illustrate, now there are myriad of sources available
in
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on
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 the
internet
 which can be helpful to choose the
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form
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from
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form
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 you want to read, For
an
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apply
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instance, if you don't find the information
in
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on
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particular
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a particular
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 website is not
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true
ture
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true
, you can
replice
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replace
 it with another website. In conclusion,
although
 the newspaper
were
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was
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 the main resource
of
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for
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 getting statements in our society, are giving
their
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its
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 role to the
internet
 in recent years. and most readers nowadays tend to prefer
the
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online
news
 for some reasons, including ease, flexibility and diversity.
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