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Many students think school classes are boring and useless. What are the factor leading to this problem? Use specific reasons to support your opinion.

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Most
students
 think
school
classes
 are monotonous and ineffectual . I suppose
school
classes
 are boring because there are lots of unimaginative things
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therefore
 I do not agree with
this
 opinion . I will put my thoughts into words in the forthcoming paragraphs. On the one hand , more and more
students
 believe
school
classes
 are monotonous and ineffectual .
In addition
,
students
 do not want to
study
 at
school
 cause there are some disadvantages in
school
 , they are
firstly
 teachers are really inexpert . The
study
 is very low-class, so children do not wish to
study
 in
school
 .
Furthermore
, nowadays there are lots of educators everywhere so more and more
students
study
 in Learning Centers .
Moreover
, The education system is deteriorating .
On the other hand
 , learning something is easier for them and they can find answers to every question.
This
 is why all
students
 prefer their phones to teachers. If they do not attend
to
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school
 , they can understand their lessons by using the phone. After these events , some teachers neglect their
students
' knowledge. While they are explaining something , they never use additional sources and sometimes they only give advice during the lesson . In conclusion, if studying at
school
 depends on entering university , all pupils pay attention to their
school
classes
. I think they change their opinion.
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