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Developments in technology are causing environmental problems. Some think the solution is for people to adjust to a simpler life while others believe that technology itself can solve these problems. Discuss both the views and give your opinion

#developments #technology #think #people #life
The newbie
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 technologies sometimes make issues and bring
into
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trouble, some people believed that modern
life
 can make the living environment much simpler and easier.
On the other hand
, some of them said problems happen by
technology
 and they can fix those problems by themselves. In my view, using
technology
 in our
life
 is making huge
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differences
diffrences
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differences
with
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past
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 and make our
life
 much better.
First
 of all, if a person
use
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technology
 in their home they can
hande
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handle
 more things at
same
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the same
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 time.
For instance
, if you make your home as a new modern AI, you can wash your clothes or cook for dinner and turn the lights on or off with your mobile phone or as
an
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 smart home you can just talk to your
equipments
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, like: hey lamp turn on! all of us believed that
as
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is
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 a
really
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interesting
intresting
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interesting
 and
also
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weird
wierd
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weird
 thing, but it can make your
life
 better
as
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 before it was. At the
next
 stage, we have to take care
about
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of
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 our environment because
,
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 in some
area
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areas
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 and parts
technology
 can be very harmful
for
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to
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 the
planets
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planet
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 or even bring climate changes.
For example
,
litter
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a litter
the litter
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 of died
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satellites
sattelites
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satellites
 in
the
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space are making the space surfaces
more dirty
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dirtier
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as
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 before, and it can reduce pollution and make
a huge and dangerous circumstances
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huge and dangerous circumstances
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 for the earth. To sum up, in my opinion, we have to be part of
these
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 cycle and sure, we have to use
these kind
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these kinds
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 of technologies, but in the right way. Being aware of harmful and
non renewable
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non-renewable
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 things can be very harmful
for
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 the future of our environment and our ancestors.
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