Some people hold that we should spend money and time on the protection of wild animals while others suggest that the money should be spent on populations living in the poorest areas of the world. What is your opinion
While there are many problems in
this
world
, not all problems should be solved, or at least not at once. Poverty and wild animals
Change the noun form
animal
protection
are two good examples. Some people
might suggest we should spend money and time on populations living in the poorest area, where
some argue to spend it Correct word choice
whereas
for
wild Change preposition
on
animals
Change noun form
animals'
animal's
protection
. I believe solving the former is better compared to the latter.
Firstly
, wild animals
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animal
protection
is important for the longevity of human existence. It is critical to keep the balance of our ecosystem. Negligence in doing this
will be very harmful for
us. Change the preposition
to
For instance
, if wild animals
' food chain impacted
, we might lose lots of food stock. In the long run, it will impact the Add a missing verb
is impacted
world
economy which probably end up to
more Change preposition
in
Correct your spelling
poverty
proverty
.
Correct your spelling
poverty
Although
, I believe that ultimately the point of protecting wild animals
is also
to protect humanity. We are protecting their lives to protect the ecosystem, preventing its
to damage our lives. Spending Change the pronoun
it
the
time to solve Correct article usage
apply
Add an article
a problem
problem
like starvation or diseases will improve lots of Change the noun form
problems
people
life quality. Change noun form
people's
For example
, if we are able to provide cure
for any disease, more Add an article
a cure
the cure
people
will be able to go to school, meaning more people
will be able to invent something. Finally
, because Correct your spelling
they
the
are more intelligent Correct your spelling
they
people
, we can solve more problem
including wild Fix the agreement mistake
problems
animals
Change the noun form
animal
protection
.
In summary, I strongly suggest that world
government or anyone Correct article usage
the world
to
invest more Remove the particle
apply
on
helping Change preposition
in
human
rather than helping Fix the agreement mistake
humans
Add an article
the animal
animal
. Fix the agreement mistake
animals
This
investment will be translated to more invention
being produced that will be able to solve more issues in Fix the agreement mistake
inventions
this
world
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