Some people hold that we should spend money and time on the protection of wild animals while others suggest that the money should be spent on populations living in the poorest areas of the world. What is your opinion

While there are many problems in
this
world
, not all problems should be solved, or at least not at once. Poverty and wild
animals
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protection
are two good examples. Some
people
might suggest we should spend money and time on populations living in the poorest area,
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some argue to spend it
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wild
animals
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protection
. I believe solving the former is better compared to the latter.
Firstly
, wild
animals
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protection
is important for the longevity of human existence. It is critical to keep the balance of our ecosystem. Negligence in doing
this
will be very harmful
for
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us.
For instance
, if wild
animals
' food chain
impacted
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, we might lose lots of food stock. In the long run, it will impact the
world
economy which probably end up
to
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more
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poverty
proverty
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poverty
.
Although
, I believe that ultimately the point of protecting wild
animals
is
also
to protect humanity. We are protecting their lives to protect the ecosystem, preventing
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to damage our lives. Spending
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time to solve
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a problem
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problem
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like starvation or diseases will improve lots of
people
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life quality.
For example
, if we are able to provide
cure
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a cure
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for any disease, more
people
will be able to go to school, meaning more
people
will be able to invent something.
Finally
, because
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the
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are more intelligent
people
, we can solve more
problem
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problems
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including wild
animals
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protection
. In summary, I strongly suggest that
world
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government or anyone
to
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invest more
on
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helping
human
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rather than helping
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the animal
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animal
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animals
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.
This
investment will be translated to more
invention
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being produced that will be able to solve more issues in
this
world
.
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