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Topic: a great city should not be confounded with a populous one. Discuss the above statement and give your own opinion

#topic #city
Well, let’s speak about studying
in
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university
 and especially about
university
 admission. In the past, when students did a
university
 degree, they tended to study in their own
country
. Nowadays, they have more
opportunity
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 to study abroad. I want to explain why, in my humble opinion, it is. And in
straithway
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straightway
 let’s go with the trump cards: because of
internet
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the internet
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. Many things became
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available
avalible
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available
 for people with
invention
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 of
internet
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the internet
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. In the
past
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 you could learn different languages in your own
country
 with
teacher
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a teacher
the teacher
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 that learned
language
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the language
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 by
book
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a book
the book
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 that
was wrote
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 by
person
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the person
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 whose mother tongue is
language
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a language
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 that you speak. Of course better to learn languages from sources in that language. The same theme is with professional literature too. In your
country
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 you
learning
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 things
of
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 your people, but it is more attractive and informative to assimilate different opinions. Actually in universities in your
country
 could be bad education in
this
specifically
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 profession. Probably in your
country
, universities are good in others. So in our
days
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 you have a choice
where
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 to study.
Also
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 there are more linguistic universities
which
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in which
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 students are
encourages
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 to travel to other countries. That
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cause
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 they have more student exchange programs. But
their
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 wouldn’t
to
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exist if so many students didn’t want to go abroad. And after
all
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this
 is a good opportunity to live and work in
other
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another country
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country
, to speak with different people that have other
mentality
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mentalities
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, traditions,
opinions
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and opinions
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.
For example
 me. I am here to learn English to go
in
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German
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a German
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university
,
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apply
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 because I want to have
an
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a
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 prestigious degree and
also
 take a root in
country
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the country
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.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Confound
  • Populous
  • Cultural heritage
  • Urban design
  • Sustainability
  • Quality of life
  • Efficient governance
  • Overcrowding
  • Infrastructure
  • Urban sprawl
  • Economic growth
  • Cosmopolitan
  • Public services
  • Metropolis
  • Urban planning
  • Environmental footprint
  • Inclusivity
  • Civic amenities
  • Heritage conservation
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