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Nowaday, more and more people commit crimes. What are causes and solutions?

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The graph of wrongdoing has increased drastically. According to a survey which is conducted by UNO, misconducting expedited by 62 per cent in
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 couple of years.
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 and unemployment are the prime factors in
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 cases. It can be depreciated by
below-mentioned
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 notions.
Firstly
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, unscholarly is the main reason for all kinds of crimes. A person who is not educated can not differentiate between wrong and right things. It is easy to do the brainwash
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pig head and can be ready for any wrongdoing
work
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 without self-analysis.
Education
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 institutes and government can play a vital role
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 decline in
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 graph. They should focus more and more to provide
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well
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education
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 which can make them
gentelman
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gentleman
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 and help to take their own decision.
Education
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 can enhance the capability of imagination.
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, Unemployment is
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 a prominent reason for
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crime. Today, well-educated youngsters are not getting
work
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 according to their field and they
start
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 do the wrong
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. The administration should take a step to taper
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 issue and provide jobs to graduates.
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, A well-educated person who spent a lot of
education
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 and now not getting any
work
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. So, he/she will frustrate and will start to do something wrong for earning.
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, the persons who are sitting in power are
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 liable for
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 scenario.Because
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 they are using civilians to execute their enemies and
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 a person starts to be a criminal.
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 Why,
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government
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 should take
a
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strict action against
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 leaders. Conclusion,
All
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of
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first
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, we should
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which
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responsible to make a civilian to criminal and take action to mitigate
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them
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.
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