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Some educationalists think that international exchange visits will benefit teenagers at school. To what extant do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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 number of education policymakers brainstorm that foreign student
exchange
 programs could be beneficial to educatees at modern schools. As
this
 stands to be a debate based on some adverse effects, I believe that the upside
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 the downside since it creates great opportunities for exposure and cultural
exchange
. On the one hand, it is believed that youths are
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 the developing stage and have the full capacity of exploring
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their horizons,
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 it will be meritorious if
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 of learning arranges international
exchange
 programs which could help them learn new foreign cultures and improve their skills.
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research conducted in China revealed that 70 per cent of the adolescents who embarked on the cultural
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exchange
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exchange
 exposition in 2015 are proven to accelerate in their spoken English.
On the other hand
, some educators feel that the cost of planning for
such
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visit
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 will be pricey, thereby becoming difficult for any average family to afford.
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, pupils who cannot stay away from their parents
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 period of time tend to be homesick when they go abroad.
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educational
 institutes in Nigeria look less on
exchange
 trips as expenses will be incurred in
such
 programs,
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, her citizens would find it difficult to support
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. In conclusion, foreign expositions could be advantageous to students based on new
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exchange
 and enhancement
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 their abilities,
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, financial burden and homesickness of pupils could stand as disadvantages. Overall, the positives
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supersede
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 much higher than the negatives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educationalists
  • international exchange visits
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • outweigh
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • school
  • exposes
  • different cultures
  • perspectives
  • enhances
  • language skills
  • promotes
  • independence
  • self-confidence
  • builds
  • lifelong friendships
  • provides
  • unique learning experiences
  • expensive
  • homesickness
  • emotional distress
  • careful planning
  • logistical arrangements
  • disrupt
  • academic progress
  • safety
  • security risks
  • cultural appropriation
  • misunderstandings
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