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Music has been and will continue to be the universal language of mankind. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is an old saying that
music
 has no
language
.
Music
 has always been known to be the best platform to heal disturbed souls and minds.throughout the years ,
music
 has been the
language
 of mankind and many individuals believe it will be in future . For many reasons
i
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 vividly agreed with the statement . In upcoming paragraphs, I will not only shed light on the topic but
also
 elaborate on my point of view regarding the matter.
To begin
 with , if we have a deep look at the topic we will certainly be able to identify a good number of reasons why
music
 has been and will be the universal
language
 of mankind . The
first
 and foremost reason behind
this
 is,
music
 has the power to display our culture and traditions through its songs which many folks find difficult due to
language
 barriers.
for instance
, in international games like cricket , football and many more national anthem plays before the game and people from all across the globe listen to the songs and show respects towards the country .
Furthermore
 ,
music
 helps people to express their
feelings
 . In today's world, so many people find it difficult to express their
feelings
 through words
therefore
 , they put their
feelings
 and emotions into a song .
For example
 , crowds prefer to sing or write a song to express their
feelings
 towards their loved ones as they believed
music
 works better than words .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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