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Some schools are very strict about their school uniform and appearance of their pupils, while others schools have very relaxed dress code. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children having school uniform?

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Nowadays a lot of
schools
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 decide that pupils have to wear
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uniforms
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 and are very strict about it.
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 other
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 have a more casual look.
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 and foremost
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uniforms
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 help to reduce discrimination and bullying in
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.
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 is because
uniforms
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 cannot reveal if
students
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 steam from a poorer or wealthier family
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 as regular clothes could do.
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result
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 Pupils get less discriminated
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against or
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 bullied on their social status or appearance.
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 uniformity creates equality which is much required and needed in education centres .A good illustration of
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research made in a primary
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 in Paris.
This
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 research wanted to find out if more equality and less mobbing
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 created in classrooms
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through
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trough
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 the implementation of a uniform. The results were significant. Bullying rates decreased to 10
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 and
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even
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 told that their mental health improved massively. Regarding the
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students
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 are unable to develop their own style and identify themselves individually due to
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uniforms
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. Individual choices
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such
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 as wearing additional
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 like earrings or rings are strictly prohibited in various
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.
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school
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 outfits often look very boring as they are designed in colours
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 as black, grey and blue.
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Moreover
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 some education centres check
students
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 on their appearance every day.
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 in some
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schools
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 they are special instructors who wait at the entrance every morning to control if boys and girls are dressed appropriately.
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 often leads to resentment and anger from the
students
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 towards
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 because they feel controlled and not respected. In conclusion, I opine that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Even though
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uniforms
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 might not look good as other
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 or are not the most comfortable they create equality between
students
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 which is the most important for the creation of a healthy and peaceful
school
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 climate.
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