Due to many human activites animals and plants life is in danger. Some think that this cannot be changed. Some think that government should do something. Discuss bothe views and give your opinion.

Humans play a vital role in maintaining a balance in the ecosystem.
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various activities of man,
animals
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and plant species are endangered. Some
people
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believe that
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cannot be
changed
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whilst others are of the view that the government should adopt some measures to save flora and fauna.
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essay will discuss both views and will
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opine on the best approach.
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, those who believe that
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is part and parcel of life are more logical towards their thinking. As the population is increasing,
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are left with no choice other than to cut down trees to build their homes. Many forests and animal habitats are being taken up by humans for their living. It is very difficult to change
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it is not in one person's hands to change the whole mentality.
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, folks believe that we have to live with
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truth and there is nothing which can be done to save wildlife and
plantation
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.
On the other hand
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, many
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have faith that if the government take certain steps in
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regard, a lot can be changed.
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: Certain areas can be restricted only to wildlife and forests. Zoos can be built so that the
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are able to survive in their natural habitats. Children should be educated about the importance of wild
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, pets and species of plants. These measures could certainly lead to one step closer towards saving plants and
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on the Earth.
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, in
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conclusion, I would say that it is always better to adopt some measures towards any kind of betterment rather than believing that nothing can be done. If the local bodies and the state try to convince
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by organising seminars and spreading awareness about the importance of the ecosystem, improvement can
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seen.

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Task response
Make the main view clear in the intro and keep it in mind in the body.
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Give one main idea per paragraph and add one or two short facts or examples to back it up.
Coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words to show order and to connect ideas, like also, but, however, for example.
Grammatical range
Check grammar: 'the government take' should be 'the government takes'; 'plantation' is usually 'plants' or 'plant life'.
Task response
The essay talks about both sides and gives a view.
Coherence and cohesion
It uses clear paragraphs and linking words like 'Firstly' and 'On the other hand'.
Task response
It gives ideas that the government can act, such as rules and education.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
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  • to give a clear example
  • such as
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  • to illustrate
  • take, for example
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