Nowadays eating habits of people around the world are changing causing them many health problem including obisity. Why do people tend to eat so badly? What can be done to improve their eating habits?

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Nowadays unhealthy eating habits are  causing
people
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around the world to get sick and die.
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the reasons as well as steps to mitigate
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Peoples
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have been eating so much fast
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have not
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free
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thatʼs why they usually eat junk
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usually they do not eat because they
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not enough
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they must go to the lesson.
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break is 20
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prepare
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. Despite
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people
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need to eat healthy
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eat do not
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nutritious
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are very developing in the world
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600 million
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people
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ill
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humans eat fast
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when they
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national
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food
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.
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,as
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progressed
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because robots have started to do the job that
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should do
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instead
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of home they began to eat more fast foods. For
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my sister
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not like cook so she always
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out.
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people
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should not misuse the opportunities created for them.
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Moreover
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people
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need to know that junk
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can harm their
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.
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, these days
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very
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fat because
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they eat wrong. In conclusion,multiple jobs and back
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workouts are the cause of obesity education and exercising the body will help prevent it
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