Nowadays eating habits of people around the world are changing causing them many health problem including obisity. Why do people tend to eat so badly? What can be done to improve their eating habits?
Nowadays unhealthy eating habits are causing
people
around the world to get sick and die. This
essay will explain in Correct your spelling
detail
ditail
the reasons as well as steps to mitigate Correct your spelling
detail
this
problem with examples in the subsequent paragraphs.
Peoples
have been eating so much fast Fix the agreement mistake
People
food
because their
have not Replace the word
there
firstly
free time
thatʼs why they usually eat junk food
Add the comma(s)
, for example,
for example
mu
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my
schoolʼs
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school
teacher
usually they do not eat because they Fix the agreement mistake
teachers
have
not enough Add a missing verb
do have
time
they must go to the lesson. Big
break is 20 Correct article usage
The big
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minutes
minuts
in our school and Correct your spelling
minutes
this
is not enough time
to Correct your spelling
prepare
orepare
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prepare
food
. Despite this
people
need to eat healthy food
. People
eat do not nutritous
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nutritious
therefor
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therefore
food
poising illness
are very developing in the world Fix the agreement mistake
illnesses
as a result
600 million peoples
ill Fix the agreement mistake
people
this
illness in year
. Add an article
a year
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Therefore
Therefor
humans eat fast Correct your spelling
Therefore
food
when they bored
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are bored
national
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with national
food
.
Secondly
,as time
progressed people
because robots have started to do the job that people
should do also
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instead
insteated
of home they began to eat more fast foods. For Correct your spelling
instead
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example
examples
my sister Add a comma
,examples
do
not like cook so she always Change the verb form
does
eat
out. Change the verb form
eats
Thus
people
should not misuse the opportunities created for them. Moreover
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,Moreover
people
need to know that junk food
can harm their body
. Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
In addition
, these days human
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humans
very
fat because Add a missing verb
are very
of
they eat wrong.
In conclusion,multiple jobs and back Change preposition
apply
of
workouts are the cause of obesity education and exercising the body will help prevent itChange preposition
apply
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