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Nowadays eating habits of people around the world are changing causing them many health problem including obisity. Why do people tend to eat so badly? What can be done to improve their eating habits?

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Nowadays unhealthy eating habits are  causing
people
 around the world to get sick and die.
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 the reasons as well as steps to mitigate
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Peoples
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People
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 have been eating so much fast
food
 because
their
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there
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 have not
firstly
 free
time
 thatʼs why they usually eat junk
food
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for example
mu
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my
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schoolʼs
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school
teacher
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teachers
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 usually they do not eat because they
have
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do have
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 not enough
time
 they must go to the lesson.
Big
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The big
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 break is 20
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minutes
minuts
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minutes
 in our school and
this
 is not enough
time
 to
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prepare
orepare
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prepare
food
. Despite
this
people
 need to eat healthy
food
.
People
 eat do not
nutritous
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nutritious
therefor
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therefore
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food
 poising
illness
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illnesses
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 are very developing in the world
as a result
 600 million
peoples
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people
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 ill
this
 illness in
year
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a year
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.
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Therefore
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Therefor
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Therefore
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 humans eat fast
food
 when they
bored
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are bored
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national
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with national
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food
.
Secondly
,as
time
 progressed
people
 because robots have started to do the job that
people
 should do
also
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instead
insteated
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instead
of home they began to eat more fast foods. For
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example
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examples
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 my sister
do
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does
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 not like cook so she always
eat
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eats
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 out.
Thus
people
 should not misuse the opportunities created for them.
Moreover
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people
 need to know that junk
food
 can harm their
body
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bodies
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.
In addition
, these days
human
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humans
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very
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are very
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 fat because
of
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apply
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they eat wrong. In conclusion,multiple jobs and back
of
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workouts are the cause of obesity education and exercising the body will help prevent it
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