Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?

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In
this
era, how to
use
technology is a much-debated topic either
this
has pros and cons in my certain opinion, providing a
phone
to an adolescent without letting them know for what purpose they only
use
this
although
keeping eye on them
instead
when they become young it becomes their basic need. On the one hand,some
parents
strict with their rules and they cannot allow their youngster to
use
Mobil but in
this
cutting edge era
this
is not possible to become a social body or get aware of the surroundings as well as pursue School,College work because working on digital apps is common nowadays and teacher send the pdf files and sometimes they arrange zoom meeting for the extra cover class and there are different groups of class and teachers on WhatsApp if they cannot
use
them they cannot get success. For ,example if one schoolboy has not his own
phone
and his class group is on WhatsApp they suddenly make a plan for tomorrow they visit the zoo but he realizes that because of the lack of a
phone
he is not involved in the activity. On the other flip side,there are the dermerties of using the
phone
at a young age they easily distracted by other things and getting involved in those things that are not dapper for
them
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parents
have to look after their children when they using phones but
this
is not the solution cannot provide them with a dial when they are
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because without
phone
work is incomplete either the job of office or school with the contact they know that where their
parents
and friends they call them and aware everything that happens.
For example
, there is a young guy lost in Indonesia and he has not the facility of a
phone
he either cannot know the number of his
parents
and
then
it becomes a problem. To conclude,I strongly believed that
parents
should allow using benefit of technology by their young children and
also
keeping eye on them and look after that what kind of things they
use
and how much time they need, Ask them to
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their phones for studies and crucial work after the children are used to and trained how to
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this
one
this
is the best thing for them
also
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • forbid
  • smartphones
  • cell phones
  • Internet access
  • importance
  • keeping in touch
  • negative impacts
  • development
  • social skills
  • engaging
  • physical activities
  • glued to a screen
  • staying connected
  • communication
  • convenience
  • limited access
  • encouraging
  • face-to-face interactions
  • family
  • friends
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