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Some people prefer shopping in shopping centres while others prefer local markets. What are the advantages of each. Which shopping experience do you prefer?

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It is true that in the modern era many
people
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 like to buy
products
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 from shopping
centres
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 whereas other
people
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 tend to explore local
shops
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 for their shopping. While there are numerous benefits of shopping from both types of
markets
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, I personally prefer going to shopping
centres
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 for my purchase. On the one hand,
people
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 who prefer shopping in local
markets
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 can enjoy several advantages. The major benefit is that they can purchase the same or similar
products
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 at a cheap rate than in large shopping
centres
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.
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 is because local
markets
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, which in most cases are established on vans or carts beside the roadside, do not need to pay high rent or employee salaries as shop owners of large shopping malls.
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, local
shops
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 can offer a lower price to their customers and
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 can attract more
people
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 to buy from them. Another reason can be that the public can explore a variety of
products
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 starting from high-end clothes, cosmetics and shoes to an affordable range of
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 in these local
shops
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 conveniently while roaming around with friends in the street.
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 shopping habit is considered to be a popular pastime for young
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 as college and university students nowadays.
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, 'New Market' located in the area of Dhaka University is a well-known destination for students and
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 from all walks of life for its affordable range of
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.
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, since large shopping
centres
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 house display
centres
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 of prominent local and international brands, a lot of
people
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 including me prefer to buy our necessary things from these
centres
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. Authentic
products
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 from brand
shops
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 can be found in these
shops
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 which is an essential aspect when purchasing clothes, cosmetics and other electronic items.
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,
people
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 find it convenient to shop in an air-conditioned environment where they can explore multiple brand
shops
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 under one roof.
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, many
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 do not like to bargain with shopkeepers while purchasing their intended items, and most of the large shopping malls have a no-bargain policy; which may influence their choice of shopping places. To conclude,
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 there are certain upsides of shopping from local
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, I would vote for the convenience and product authenticity that can be found in shopping malls.
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