It is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30, as this is the best for the individual and for society. Do you agree or disagree

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it does not sit well with me for
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to be in a union before they are in their
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in our African culture
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would marry at a young age and they would face some much hardships.
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one gets married at 20 soon after university.There's no
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form of investment he/she has made ,eg house or car for the family As soon as he marries the wife gets pregnant adding more responsibility to the fee they had.
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many suffered in poverty,due to improper planning because of
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culture.
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on my point of view when one is in his
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it's time to give out your focus
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your children .So that when you reach 30 you will have time with your family.
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most
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will be immature for marriage requires maturity.As an
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they will be a lot of divorces .Which will lead to a broken generation as most men will not give maintenance to their wives , leaving them vulnerable to any kind of abuse for them to fend for their children.Due to divorce
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many will find relief in drugs,
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to a lesser extent getting married before
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society and the individual.As couples can build their fortunes together.
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being able to play with their grandchildren at a tender age.
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it's quite beneficiary to ladies to have children early before they are in their late 30s.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fertility
  • Maternal health
  • Psychological stability
  • Social maturity
  • Economic benefits
  • Shared responsibilities
  • Ancestral customs
  • Cultural imperatives
  • Personal development
  • Career establishment
  • Societal norms
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Divorce rates
  • Life decisions
  • Subjective wellbeing
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