You are studying English at a private language school attended by many international students. You are planning a surprise birthday party for a friend who has been feeling particularly sad and homesick. Write to another classmate and invite him/her to the party. In your letter: * explain the reason for the party * give the date and time of the party * suggest what the classmate could bring to the party

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Dear Sara I hope you are doing well. I am Mary and I decided to write a letter to tell you about my

planning

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for Mike's birthday. I am not sure if you know Mike or not. He is a handsome and kind boy

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, unfortunately, always looks upset and never laughs. Merely smiles. I think

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depression is related to being far from family. As I realize, His father has died and his mother is alone. He often thinks about his family.

Due to

these, I looked for his date of birth and I decided to hold a birthday party for him to lift his spirits. He was born on the first of October and luckily, it is at the weekend. I think it would be fine if we start at

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pm. I checked the weather forecast and I am sure the weather will be perfect on that day.

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, it would be excellent If his mother came. I am thinking about some ways to bring his mother. I will bake a cake and buy candies.

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, I am going to bring DJs in order to have suitable music. Please blow some balloons and bring them. Since

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I am not able to do so! I have designed some greeting cards. The address and date will be written on them and next session, I will give you them. I am looking forward to your answer. It would be very exciting and

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, effective to express our love and attention to Mike. I am sure that he will be very happy. Sincerely H

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coherence and cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea to enhance clarity.

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Consider varying sentence structures to improve readability and flow.

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Provide a bit more detail about what the classmate could bring, such as types of balloons or additional decoration ideas.

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The letter has a clear and polite tone, appropriate for the context.

coherence and cohesion

The closing and greeting are appropriately used, maintaining a friendly tone.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
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moreover
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for example
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however
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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

264 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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