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In many parts of the world girls and boys are educated together in co-educational or mixed schools. Some people think that girls and boys benefit from being educated separately in single-sex schools. To what extent do you agree with this view?

Parents and their children consider many different factors while trying to find
perfect
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 educational institution. Going to
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 or mixed school is one of them. In my opinion,
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 element does not affect
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 of education students get. It rather affects their social and emotional maturity. For
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 reason, I prefer mixed schools over
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 years are
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 of
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 in our bodies. Certainly,
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people
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 and friends they are surrounded with
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 their emotional development and well-being.
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, it is important that they learn how to cooperate and hang out with friends of
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 sex as soon as they can to avoid communication issues later in life, especially at their
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. The reason why attending
a mixed schools
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mixed schools
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 is beneficial is differences that exist between boys and girls that are somewhat big and it is important for youngsters to understand them. It encourages one to learn more about one’s society.
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, there are some negative aspects of attending a mixed school.
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,
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 majority of young
people
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 start to show interest in
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 of
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 sex while there are still very emotional. It can affect
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 ability to concentrate on education. Not only that, but
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 it might lead to starting
a relationships
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 too soon.
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 causing many disappointments and heartbreaks.
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 it can enhance one’s insecurities when being rejected. To summarize,
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 years are
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 delicate period of life when
people
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 learn to socialize, meet their friends and sometimes love partners.
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, single-sex schools can have
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 impact on concentration, co-educational give more natural
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surroundings
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 which is important for later years in life.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • opportunity
  • collaboration
  • gender equality
  • peer pressure
  • personal development
  • academic performance
  • social skills
  • traditional roles
  • creative thinking
  • critical thinking
  • self-confidence
  • peer interaction
  • curriculum
  • learning environment
  • academic success
  • gender segregation
  • academic needs
  • equal opportunities
  • competitive environment
  • extracurricular activities
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