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Nowadays, due to the improvement of technology, more and more products tend to transfer from physical to online ones. Because of
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 some
people
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 claimed that
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printed newspaper and books will no more necessary in the future,
people
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 can just browse them online for free. In my opinion, I think the advantages of reading online will outweigh the disadvantages. There are some
people
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reject
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who reject
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to read
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 electronic books and online news on
there
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their
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 ipads or
cellphones
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cell phones
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. The reason is that they can't touch the physical one and enjoy the
touchness
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toughness
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 and sound by browsing the pages.
Secondly
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, if we need to read mutual
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articles
article
articals
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articles
, we have to stare at the electronic device for a long time. By doing
this
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, our eyes will feel really exhausted, especially
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the
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elder
people
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. Despite
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those disadvantages, I still think there are more benefits
by
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 reading online.
Firstly
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, we don't need to pay
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 fee for that.
Thus
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, we can save our money and use it in another area.
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,
instead
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 of printing and wasting a lot of paper, we can solve the issue of global warming because the less
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paper will be used the less the forests will disappear. If we can protect the tree from cutting down too much, the leave of the tree will absorb more carbon dioxide and transfer it into O2. In conclusion, there are many pros and cons of reading o, whereas I strongly believe that reading mutual newspapers or books will more benefits than reading printed ones.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advancements
  • automation
  • productivity
  • opportunities
  • sustainability
  • cooperation
  • innovative
  • globalization
  • identities
  • economies
  • adaptability
  • continuous
  • transformed
  • implications
  • privacy
  • mental health
  • dynamics
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