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Some peope say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#peope #time #loss #species #plants #animals
Human
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Humans
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 know there are plenty of environmental issues in our life,
in
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and in
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 our world. Most of us say the main
problem
 is
loss
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the loss
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 of certain species, as given plants and animals. Whether
,
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 other some think, there are
a
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more essential
problems
 more than
this
. In my opinion,
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the scarcity
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 of species is the one main part of
more
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the more
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 important
problems
. It means all of
trouble
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the trouble
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 is crucial...
To begin
 with, we can't imagine our life without plants and animals. Even the death of one animal or
loss
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the loss
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 of a plant is very important to us.
This
problem
 is difficult to discuss, I think. Why are species disappearing? Why
we think
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do we think
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 it's the main one? Because
,
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 we are
product
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the product
a product
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 of environment.
Therefore
,
this
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this problem
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problems
 is linked to
humans
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 wrongdoing.
As a result
, it is
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definitely
definetely
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definitely
major
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a major
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 environmental
problem
 of our time.
Secondly
, what other
problems
we
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do we
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 have?
Variety
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A variety
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 of issues can be mentioned. These
includes
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include
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 water shortage,
pollutions
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pollution
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, global warming, waste management,
biodiversity
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and biodiversity
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 loss
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 It has always been the most important
issues
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issue
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. In conclusion, environmental
problems
 keep popping up
everyday
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every day
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. They just keep getting harder and harder to sort out. Our main goal is to solve
this
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this problem
these problems
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problems
, not to prioritize it.
Problem
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The problem
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 is
problem
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the problem
a problem
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....
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