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More and more people want to buy famous brands of clothes, cars and other items. What are the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

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people
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 purchasing
products
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 from well-known brands become increasing in today's era. many
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 pursue these things because they look rich. there are many negative effects on younger
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. I will discuss the reasons and how it affected the youngster in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, nowadays
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 buy mostly branded things
such
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 as clothes, cars and many more because it gives them
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. there are many reasons
people
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 purchase
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.
Firstly
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, in
this
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 situation advertising plays a vital role which manipulates
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 to buy branded
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. The advertisement illustrates well design and editing of videos or photos so,
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 are easily persuaded
products
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.
Secondly
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, advertisement makers take glamorous and famous
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 to perform the
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 ambassador.
Hence
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, younger think that they
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also
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 use these
products
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 so, so
people
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 buy
products
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.
For example
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, Virat Kohali
brand
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 an ambassador of Noise Company which sell smartwatch and buds
therefore
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,
people
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 who fan of Virat, would always purchase the
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products
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.
On the other hand
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, it
also
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 creates negative effects on human beings. Some
people
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 they have not enough money to purchase branded
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 but they
also
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 get loans from banks or buy on EMI because branded things give
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. These days,
people
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 are compared with other statuses and they show off their selves.
For Instance
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, nowadays, the iPhone trend is at its peak and
people
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 think that iPhone gives the
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 of high rich
people
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 who do not have enough money they get a loan or borrowed and buy. In conclusion, the
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 is the only label of
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 that can not give the
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 of living life. advertisement is a reason
people
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 buy
products
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 of a
brand
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 and they create negative impacts on
people
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Conspicuous consumption
  • Brand loyalty
  • Elitism
  • Marketing strategies
  • Consumer psychology
  • Purchase behavior
  • Economic stratification
  • Sustainability
  • Luxury goods
  • Peer influence
  • Global marketing
  • Brand equity
  • Materialistic values
  • Status symbol
  • Quality perception
  • Investment piece
  • Influencer culture
  • Exclusivity
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