In many countries, people wear more western-style clothes (suits and jeans) than their traditional clothes. Why? Is it a positive or negative development?

Some
people
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and more
countries
almost all
citizen's
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wear other
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clothes
(suits and jeans) than their unwritten
clothes
.From my way of thinking,wearing other
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clothes
is to influence very bad for
countries
to save their
traditional
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. There is no doubt that
people
wear
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western-style
clothes
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caused more problems than merits.As a matter of fact,If all
people
don't wear their folk
clothes
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to endanger their
traditional
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.For
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countries
,
this
is beneficial,because their
clothes
common
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other
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countries
.
Besides
that, it has many negative aspects for our country.For
this
reason,we lose
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traditional
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which is our ancestors dropped things many years ago.
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is a glaring example, nowadays many homies wear different
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clothes
.
This
cause many problems.We lose traditional
clothes
; yarmulke,satin and
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. To be sure,
this
is may beneficial for some
people
.
This
reasonable
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to the
extend
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that some
people
want to wear informal
clothes
.But
this
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harmful and through
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they increase their sin. In
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analysis,despite the fact that western-style
clothes
exist nowadays
this
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harmful and very shame every country.For
this
reason,I am convinced that nationality is a human pattern.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Influence
  • Perception
  • Modern
  • Trendy
  • Practicality
  • Comfort
  • Professionalism
  • Integration
  • Global economy
  • Cultural identity
  • Appreciation
  • Preservation
  • Individual expression
  • Freedom of choice
  • Positive
  • Negative
  • Impacts
  • Local industries
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