Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

In recent decades,
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environmental
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are directly influencing birth and death. Especially particular species of plants and animals lost and degrade which are
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problem in recent years.
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air, water,
soil
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pollution are more important environmental issues. The begin with, the loss of particular species of plants and animals
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initiates
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an imbalances
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imbalances
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ecosystem,
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is why for biology,
food
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chain is lost,
for example
, if
mamals
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mammals
pr herbivores are nothing left their
eathings
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things
eating
ratings
, predators are too
fauing
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facing
famine.
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it might be started
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factors. Most of them are extinct soon, the reasons are their eating habits, habitant can be destroyed by natural selection and natural
disaster
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other things.
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problems
, there might be
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environment. In recent years,
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industrial evolutions and human works are more initiated these
problems
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as air pollution
are
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made by industry fumes,
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vehicle
vechicle
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vehicle
smokes
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and fuel burning. These spread in the atmosphere,
also
most of them contain chemical harmful elements.
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in our time traffic condition, smokings are big issues in our surroundings. These
problems
are not only in
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body
,
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but
also
in living things are affected by them. Of
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this
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effects are the worst ever. All in all, these
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directly and indirectly influenced
a
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number of
problems
. Most of them are environmental
problems
. In my perspective, natural disasters and selections, we don't have any action against these. for humans, we will
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be chance to a improve and spot our earlier actions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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