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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In recent years disappearance of
plants
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 and
animals
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 has been one of the big environmental issues. While some will believe that we should care about much more serious problems
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 as global warming. I strongly believe that the loss of particular
species
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 of
plants
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 and
animals
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 is important as
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as other environmental problems.
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 with, supporters of
animals
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 and
plants
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 believe that these natural assets play a role to maintain the beauty of nature as well as balancing the ecosystem. The loss of
species
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 can break the food chain in the environment.
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, if some
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 of
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 and
animals
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 disappear, other
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 will lose their feed.
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, other people said that the rest of the
plants
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 and
animals
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' issues are not
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serious problems.,
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 the lack of water could be the main concern, decreasing water levels and dirty water on some continents.
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, every year ice increasingly melting is a big problem for polar bears. They have no place to leave.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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