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Some countries achieve international success, building specialized sports facilities for top athletes to train instead of providing sports facilities that every one can use. Is it positive or negative?

#countries #success #sports #facilities #athletes #train
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It is undeniable that elite
athletes
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 need some specialized
sports
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facilities
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 to keep an excellent performance.
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, I don’t agree that the state should build more specialized
sports
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facilities
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 for top
athletes
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 to train.
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, I firmly believe that a larger
number
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 of
sports
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facilities
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 should be opened to the public. In the
first
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 place, Providing public
sports
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facilities
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 can attract an increasingly larger
number
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 of
people
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 to participate kinds of
sports
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 events which will boost those top
athletes
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 more popular as
people
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 will pay more attention to
sports
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.
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, with the growth of the
number
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 of basketball courts in China, professional players
such
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 as Yao, Yi and so on have got unprecedented status in
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 country.
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, as celebrities, their success
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 inspires many young
people
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 to devote themselves to
sports
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. In
this
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 way, the top
athletes
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 and ordinary
people
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 have become a positive cycle in the
sports
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 industry through investment in public
sports
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facilities
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. In
the
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second
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 place, public
health
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 is more important than international success. Building more
sports
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facilities
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 for citizens is an effective way to encourage
people
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 to take part in some
sports
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 as it is convenient to find places and equipment.
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, with the improvement of public
health
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, the fund
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 allocated to medicine and the
health
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 system can be used in other areas.
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, getting more gold medals in international competitions like the Olympic games or the World Cup can not bring any positive impact directly.
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, the government and society will spend a large
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 of resources which can be used to develop education and medicine on these events. In conclusion, considering the economy and public
health
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, it is negative that spending on specialized
sports
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facilities
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. I maintain that the state should construct more public
sports
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facilities
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 for everyone.
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