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Many students find it difficult to pay attention at school what are the reasons for this? What could be done to solve this problem?

#students #attention #school
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Most of the
students
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 are
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losing
loseing
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losing
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in
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 their studies day by day, especially at school. As well as, it is a serious
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 for their future life because it will
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to
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their future lifestyle.
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, it has many solutions and
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this
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problem
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. On the one hand, some
students
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 play computer games
instead
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 of studying. One of the
first
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 reasons is probably because of
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 their teacher. If their teachers can
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 a love of learning in their
students
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, their
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never
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 interested in different types of games,
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 as at school.
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, teachers only punish their pupils during the lesson
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 pupils are simply bored at that time pupils lose their attention to
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. One of the best solutions to
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problem
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 is that tutors should create an interesting atmosphere in the classroom at
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 time
they
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 can pay attention to
study
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.
On the other hand
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, not only teachers but
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parents
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 are responsible for their
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children's
childeren's
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children's
 education. So, their
parents
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 need to motivate them to focus every day.
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, when my relative's
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 went to work in another city and their child's schooling was very slow.
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,
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parents
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 control is important for the child to learn. All
parents
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 should increase their control over their children's education. In conclusion,
lack
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 of attention
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 children's education is a big
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. If children are directed to something they are interested in they will focus on it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • concentration
  • attention span
  • distractions
  • technology
  • boredom
  • tiredness
  • engagement
  • learning disabilities
  • teaching techniques
  • classroom size
  • family issues
  • health problems
  • motivational strategies
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