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Due to many human activities animal's and plants' life is in danger. Some think that this cannot be changed. Some think that government should do something. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Wildlife and plant life are under threat because of human activities. Few
people
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 believe that it would not be changed. While others think that
government
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 should take steps to protect them. I tend to incline towards the latter notion. On the one hand, there are various reasons why
people
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 think that
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, due to the high rate of the population which increases the demand for goods and products made by
animals
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 and plants. To elaborate, now
people
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 are more relying on their basic necessities
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 as food, cosmetics, medicines, and papers which are particularly made of
animals
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 and plants.
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, due to different and new growing diseases scientists are experimenting on
animals
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 to save human life which sometimes ends with sacrificing test
animals
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.
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, many
people
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 are annually suffering from cancer worldwide so, in
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 to protect them rodents and mice are used as test
animals
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 to discover new medicine
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, scientists are left with no option but to use
animals
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 to prevent human life threats.
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, I believe that the primary reason why the
government
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 should take
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 initiative to protect them is that the public has faith in the
government
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 to take certain steps in
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 regard. To explicate, they should make strict rules for forests and wild areas
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 as by organizing the safety guard and taking strict action against illegal poaching of
animals
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.
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 to,
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 they should not only preserve rare or threatened
animals
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 in zoos so they can survive but
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 should provide a
naturalhabitats
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natural habitat
natural habitats
 for their better
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preservation
preserving
preservtion
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preservation
.
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, the Indian
government
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 has been running the programs of international animal protection and plant preservation schemes in schools as well as a local
recidence
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residence
resident
 with the help of orientations and other modes. As result,
people
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 can move one step forward toward
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animals
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 and plant protection. In conclusion,
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 the points are in the favor of the use of plants and
animals
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 due to the increasing needs for a population that cannot be controlled by
people
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, I,
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, still believe that with the help of the
government
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people
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 will be educated not to overuse both of the
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