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Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

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People
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 around the world prefer to wear stylish clothes. In my opinion,
style
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 is one of the most important things in
modern
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 world which is not only
helpful
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 to make a
person
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 more attractive but is
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 can emphasise some individual traits and introduce a personality.
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 with, wearing
fashionable
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 outfit make a
person
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 feel more confident in society. Feeling
yourself
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attractive and good-looking
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 a great impact on an individual’s mood.
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, those who are working in
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on
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 high positions have to follow
formal
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a formal
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style
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 in clothes for a special purpose. Namely, it creates a working atmosphere rather
more
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than if there
was
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 no
any
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style
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 requirements. In my opinion, following
style
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 novelties is a very important habit. There is a fact that
people
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 have their
first
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 expression while scanning how a
person
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 is looking.
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, if an individual looks strange and their clothes
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 old-fashioned or weird, probably the majority of us will think that a
person
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 is mad
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 that might be not the truth.
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,
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 twice while choosing what to wear is essential.
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, sometimes
people
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 pay too
many
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 attention
on
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 how they look like while they forget to develop their personality.
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, there are some individuals who would sell everything they have if there was an opportunity to buy a rare item to complete their look.
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, it is better to find a golden mean in a
style
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 and some personal qualities. To conclude, many of us find it vital to have a stylish outfit because it helps to influence
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employees and create a
first
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 impression on strangers. Personally, I think that
people
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 who look fashionable can feel more relaxed while their look helps them to feel confident.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • express individuality
  • boost confidence
  • self-esteem
  • social status
  • designer labels
  • cultural icons
  • art and creativity
  • financial strain
  • overspend
  • fast fashion
  • culture of waste
  • economic growth
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