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Some people believe that it is better to stay with one company during a career. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view?

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Some people assert that working for the same employer throughout their working life is a better option than moving to another
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 frequently. Is there any merit to
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 belief?
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 it is reasonable to believe
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 statement in terms of
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 security and a relaxing working environment, it will have clear drawbacks:
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, the deterioration of working motivation, and
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, the risk of losing the chance to find better work conditions. It is true that working at the same
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 can bring many benefits
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 as promotion to a higher position and building a profound friendship with colleagues, which allows you to work comfortably and makes a stable life status.
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, there are
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 potential shortcomings.
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, repeating similar jobs can reduce
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 stimulation, and result in a loss of motivation to learn new skills. According to a survey conducted by Asahi news publisher, more than half of the employees who have worked more than 20 years at the same
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 answered they were reluctantly forced to stay there because they had no skills that are in demand. By changing jobs, people can stay motivated as they will meet new co-workers, situations, and challenges.
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, those who work permanently in one place tend to avoid starting
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 hunting which has the possibility of expanding your perspective and finding more ideal occupations.
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, a recruiting agency can help you seek a
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 from a wider range of industries that you may have never noticed.
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, you would miss opportunities to find positions with more financially rewarding and personally fulfilling. In conclusion, there are serious disadvantages to working only for one
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 in view of declining interest in your
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 and failing to discover an ideal occupation. We must consider these defects.
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