The most important function of music is that it helps people reduce stress.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Music

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has been the entertainment

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for people from ancient times. It is widely believed that

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most important use is mitigating

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stress

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viewpoint. It is true that

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music

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is a great

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reliever. It has been found that

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is caused by

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of cortisol which is required but increased levels would cause

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. As

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can mitigate the levels of cortisol bringing it down to a healthy level would relieve the

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a great deal. Another benefit is generating alpha brain waves causing reduced

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levels when

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music

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is being played.

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, the

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acts as a

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reliever only when the listener likes the

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being played, and it would cause more

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otherwise

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, it is not applicable to everybody as a

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reliever. Making the listener happier is the profound use of

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many people including those in

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industry.

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is because it releases

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hormone’ which makes people feel happy. It helps to fix the

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of a person

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if they are in an unhealthy

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lifts the

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of a person who is already in a happy

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, a lover in a good

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may feel like every word in the song is written for them. Happiness is the ultimate goal of everybody’s life and

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providing happiness can be construed as the principal benefit of

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. In conclusion, whereas

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has many benefits, fixing the

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can be considered

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of prime importance as widely perceived by the entertainment industry.

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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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277 words

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