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The most important function of music is that it helps people reduce stress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Music
 has been the favourite entertainment medium for people from ancient times. It is widely believed that its most important use is mitigating
stress
. I partly agree with
this
 notion and
this
 essay will discuss why bringing happiness is the prime use of
music
. It is true that
music
 is a great
stress
 reliever. It has been found that it is caused by the high
levels
 of cortisol which is required, but increased
levels
 of the same would cause
stress
. As
music
 can mitigate the
levels
 of cortisol bringing it down to a healthy level would relieve
stress
 to a great extent. Another benefit is generating alpha brain waves causing reduced
stress
levels
 when low-beat
music
 is being played.
However
, the
music
 acts as a
stress
 reliever only when the listener likes the
music
 being played, and it would cause more
stress
otherwise
.
Therefore
, it has not been a universal remedy as a
stress
 reliever. Making the listener happier is the profound use of
music
 by many people, including those in the entertainment industry.
This
 is because it releases the hormone called endorphin, which makes people feel happy. It helps to fix the
mood
 of a person if they are in an unhealthy
mood
. It
also
 lifts the
mood
 of a person who is already in a happy
mood
.
For instance
, a lover in a good
mood
 may feel like every word in the song is written for them. Happiness is the ultimate goal of everybody’s life and
thus
 providing happiness can be construed as the principal benefit of
music
. In conclusion, whereas
music
 has many benefits, fixing the
mood
 can be considered of prime importance as widely perceived by the entertainment industry.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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