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government should spend more money on railways than roads. what do you think about this?

#government #money #railways #roads
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 contemporary era, the transportation system needs to be well organized in big cities around the globe. Many individuals opine that
government
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 should expand more budget on trains rather than highways b. I agree with that notion because railways
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environment
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 friendly as well as
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helps to reduce
traffic
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 congestion. To commence with,
railway
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the railway
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 is
very
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 effective way to reduce air pollution as in
mega cities
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megacities
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,
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most dwellers prefer private cars for their regular commute. When authorities will build
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better communication way by trains
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 more people will use railroads.
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, a growing number of people while start using trains for their commuting
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 can reduce private vehicles which leads to
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carbon
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 emissions.
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, the
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 of Singapore has made
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a railroad
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railroad
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railroads
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 around the metropolis which
is lessen
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 car
using
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.
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, in order to reduce air pollution it is
feasible
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a feasible
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 proposal to
rise
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raise
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budget
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the budget
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 for
railway
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the railway
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.
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,
traffic
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 congestion is a common phenomenon in different metropolises. Citizens are regularly confronting
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 issue
in
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 certain times.
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Government
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The government
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 budget for enlarging
rail
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the rail
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 network is very effective to reduce private car
using
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 which is the key factor
of
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traffic
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jam
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.
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,
traffic
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 gathering in peak times had lessened after
creating
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metro
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 in Hong Kong.
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, rail journey is comfortable and safe compre to road transport. For curbing
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 gathering issue train transportation system truly workable solution.
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,
increase
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 money on spending railroad is
well
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 approach. In conclusion, the
government
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 should spend
extra
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 amount
for
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on
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 making new infrastructure
of
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rail
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the rail
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 network as it will lessen
traffic
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 gathering and help to decrease pollution.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
  • urban
  • last-mile connectivity
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