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Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that having these people give a talk to school students is the best way to tell them about the dangers of committing a crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some
criminals
 became good citizens after being released back into society.
Although
 some people believe that having these people give a talk is the best way to inform school
students
 about the
dangers
 of embarking on a
crime
, I would argue that there are some better
ways
 to achieve that aim. There are a few reasons why having a meeting with people who committed a
crime
 with school
students
 is a
favorable
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 way to help
pupils
 understand the
dangers
 of committing a
crime
. One reason is that
this
 kind of person will have a realistic view of the crimes since they embarked on a real
crime
 before, which gives them a genuine experience.
As a result
, their
information
 is reliable, which will make a huge impact on
students
. Another reason is that some former prisoners can provide detailed
information
 about the
dangers
 which exist in a
crime
.
This
 is because there are many secrets beyond a
crime
 that are known by only former
criminals
.
However
, some other
ways
 are more effective in giving
information
 to
pupils
 about the threats of starting a
crime
. One effective way is reading the
information
 in an online newspaper as it provides huge data about crimes around the world.
For example
, Vnexpress is the biggest online paper in Vietnam which provide many posts written about the
dangers
 of embarking on a
crime
 and the punishment of
criminals
.
Furthermore
, school
students
 can read some books about the
dangers
 of
crime
 written by many experts in the world. If
pupils
 can read some books by experts relating to
this
 subject, they will have a brief review with reliable data, which delivers
information
 effectively to them. In conclusion,
students
 can talk with former
criminals
 to know about the threats of starting a
crime
, but there are some other
ways
 to provide better
information
 about
this
 topic. It is recommended that
pupils
 should try many
ways
 to have correct
information
 about the topic.
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