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Some people say that computers can translate languages well, so children do not need to study foreign languages anymore. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #computers #languages #children #study
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relax just for
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good
rest
 or sleep, while others say people need to do exercise or sport to relax. In my
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 the best way to live a
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grate
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 life
to
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 combine both methods in
complex
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. You can not become happy and healthy if you
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 to do exercises or
workout
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 without good
rest
 and sleep because you will be always exhausted. But
in
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 take a pause for a
rest
 but never do sport, most likely that you
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 not enough energy during the day. That’s why
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 suppose that everything must be in balance. We should care about nutrition,
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 of
body
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,
try
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 have a good
rest
 after work with
full
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concentrate
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 on our chill time nether watching TV on a sofa. Try to figure out what
do
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you want to do outside
on
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 the fresh air before you go to sleep. It can be just
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 walk to keep your
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mind
minds
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mind
in
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 peace. Nowadays the most popular
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think
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 is a
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harmony
 and
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mindful
mindfull
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mindful
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lifestyle
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life style
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.
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Further
more
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every
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person
persons
perons
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person
i
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 have ever met
last
 ten
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months
monthes
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months
 told me that they usually do yoga, go to
gym
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, try get sleeping well,
cooking
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 healthy food,
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go to a psychologist
for
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 work through their childhood trauma. I think society becomes more conscious, everybody cares about
health
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 and
i
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 guess it is maybe
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due
dou
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due
 to
increasing
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coast
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 of medical
serves
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 and a lot of
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videos
vidios
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videos
 from popular
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influencers
influensers
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influencers
 about
such
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life style
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