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Some parents buy their children a large of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

#parents #children #toys #child
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A part of parents purchases their
children
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 a lot of
toys
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 to play with them. Some people including me, believe that buying numerous
toys
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 is not a suitable method for
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,
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 others think
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 will be a good approach. Providing different
toys
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 for your baby could lead to some serious problems.
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 factories need remarkable materials and most parts of the extract from nature and
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 has a dangerous effect on the nature and environment. New toy prices are
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 very high and you need to spend a substantial part of your budget, but with reasonable ,shopping you can
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 save your money and spend on
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's education or took that for their future. Different and variable
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 make the home busy. As your child be smaller surely they make the home condition worse with their
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 on all sides of the home and it will be so difficult to gather them day after day.
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 if parents always buy
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 that
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 want shapes their personalities badly and they think they could reach everything they want and in their adulthood maybe they become depressed about
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 matter. Some parts of society and experts believe that buying a large number of
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 is an appropriate way. They said
toys
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 can improve child's creativity and playing with complicated
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 makes them smarter and more hardworking and make them ready for their future.
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 are a way of communication between
children
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 and if they have numerous
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 they will be able to play together and learn about social interactions. They
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 said with various
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children
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 will be more satisfied and they will be happier. In conclusion, even though I agree with some comments I mentioned above about buying large scales of
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 but as I wrote in the
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 paragraph it is crucial to have tolerance because overindulgence in
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 matter makes harmful threats to society.
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