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Some people view sports as an important feature of our society while others feel it is nothing more than a leisure activity. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #sports #feature #society #leisure #activity
The given line graph compares the
rate
 of
birth
 and mortality in a particular country in Europe from 1950 onwards and
also
 gives projections up to 2050. Overall, it is clear that the death
rate
 will be more than the
birth
rate
 by 2050. We can see from the graph that the
rate
 of deaths has fluctuated slightly, which is 70000 by now and it is anticipated
this
 trend will continue by 2030, but from 2030
this
 the given
rate
 will increase moderately to 80000. When it comes to the
birth
rate
, it showed sharp growth in population from 70000 to 100000, but
this
 figure experienced a downward trend reaching an all-time low of 60000, after which It has reached 70000 as same as present deaths rated. It is expected the number of
birth
 to be remained steady by 2050.
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