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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Disposing of debris has become a big problem for society. Because there is no proper measure to discharge the
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. In
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 accumulation.
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 with, undeniably, the main reason for a significant amount of debris accumulation is population.
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, usage and wasting are directly proportional to the population.
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, another major reason is that there is no good rule for disposing of
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 to maintain the balance in the ecosystem.
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, people are wasting rubbish in the sea or on the road recklessly in almost all countries
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 of recycling or putting them in a bin.
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 of wasting recklessly, rubbish has accumulated and it becomes a huge problem for the environment.
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, a good solution is that authorities should regulate in order to control
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 high volume of garbage collection.
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, the government should put a ban on products which are not eco-friendly like plastic cups or straws as those products are indissoluble
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 that can pollute the earth.
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, the government should enlighten the public on the importance of recycling and how to
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 debris carefully in the dustbins which are categorized
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 the sorts of trash.
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, if people did not follow the
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they should be fined.
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, in Singapore, no one can
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litter their trash wherever they are. If they
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 not
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 their litter in a determinate dustbin, they will get a fine of $500.
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,
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 discharging more and more
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 is because of both increasing populations and lack of discipline among the public, governments can undertake to set a proper ban to reduce the amount of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • disposable culture
  • over-packaging
  • non-recyclable
  • public awareness
  • waste management
  • environmental impact
  • recycle
  • recycling facilities
  • waste separation
  • single-use products
  • infrastructure
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