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Some feel governments should invest in preserving minority languages, while others feel this is not a good use of resources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There are split opinions regarding learning
languages
. Some believe that the government support some non-useful
languages
, whereas another group of thinker support only the main
languages
.
however
, both have their own pros and cons.
However
, some tounges are dying out.
Therefore
, before commenting on my decision, both opinions would be discussed. Examining the former opinion, the primary argument the supporters would put forward is everybody put the fund in learn foreign
languages
such
 as English and french.
This
 is because people follow
western
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 culture.
In addition
, they
also
 believe that those
languages
 are more important rather than the mother language.
Therefore
 these reasons they do not want to learn minor
languages
also
 there are few native speakers who could teach their
languages
. I think it is not relevant to invest in these
languages
 if there are not a lot of people willing to learn.
On the contrary
, the latter view suggests that government invest funds in the main
languages
 of our culture because we lost our mother
languages
 meanwhile we lost our traditions.
Besides
this
 things
also
 affect our nationality and the growth of the nation.
Also
,
this
 part of humanity is afraid of the disappearance of national characteristics and differences To conclude and give my opinion, I would say that
also
 support our major
languages
 compared to minor
languages
 because your personality depends on your language is the most appropriate way to deal with
this
 situation. in the big picture, the
first
 priority is your mother tongue than after other
languages
 you learn.
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