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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In today’s world, people are using technological
devices
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 and online sources like the internet more and more every day. It is predicted that we will use these to read our news and
books
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, and printed versions will be ancient in the
future
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. It is agreed that we will be depending on technology and its online features in the
future
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, mainly because of our lifestyle choices and environmental issues. In
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 era, being able to accomplish tasks online has a major part in our lives and regarding
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technological development, it is likely to increase in the
next
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 100 years. One may find
extremely
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 easy to read
books
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 and news online, because they wouldn’t need to carry their belongings wherever they go, except
one
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for one
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 technological gadget.
Devices
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 like Kindle are excellent examples
for
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,
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 because they provide
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easy access to readable items only with a hand gesture.
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, it is clear that
books
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 are becoming more expensive day by day and it may be hard for some people to buy
books
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, even newspapers regularly. Online shopping can offer a monthly subscription
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 so that one can use reading apps or
devices
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 whenever they want. Printing
books
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 may create problems regarding
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environment and climate change too. Because of the world’s overpopulation, there is a need for more production
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books
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 and
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 means a dramatic increase in cutting down trees.
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, when a book is printed, a need for distribution occurs too.
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 is highly costly and dangerous for
environment
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the environment
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 because high amounts of fuel
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 needed in order to provide transportation. Providing
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 fuel means that there will be
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 of natural resources. In conclusion, online
devices
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 are becoming extremely popular these days. It is highly possible that we will be reading our
books
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 and news online in the
future
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 because it is easier to do so and it
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 has environmental benefits. In my opinion, these are the two main reasons why printed
books
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 and newspapers will be ancient in the
future
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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