Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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, some governments feel that their main vision is the economic enhancement of the
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.
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, I strongly agree with those who believe that the governments should be focused on other
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health
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, and
Education
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. On the one hand, those who support
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financial improvement say that the progress of the
economy
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plays an important role in individuals' life that could be beneficial for them in several ways. If a
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concentrates properly to thrive
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financial
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, they develop
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infrastructures
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throughout
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throughout
the
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to enrich the road networks, and they could be able to receive
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foreign investments.
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, a report has been published in the daily newspaper a couple of months ago that China has been investing
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those countries which are progressing steadily in the economic arenas in the
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ten years.
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, the living standards of a nation
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dramatically when the governments focus on the enhancement of
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economy
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the economy
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.
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, the rate of
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poverty could be declined day by day.
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, in my opinion, the progress of
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education
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the education
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and
health
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sectors
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ensure
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the fundamental rights of the citizens
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and make them independent from all perspectives. A quality
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system might be provided
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educated nation, and it brings overseas’ people to study in a
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which
enhance
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the
economy
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.
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, recently a study has shown that international students have contributed a huge amount of money
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the United Kingdom’s
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by paying their
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in the year 2020, while other
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had
least
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contribution
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epidemics of Covid-19.
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, by improving
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industries, the
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government
governments
goverments
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government
can make strong the
economy
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eloquently.
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, people will not be visited other countries for better treatment, and they will be spent the money in their home
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which they budgeted for abroad. In Conclusion,
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economic progress has many advantages undoubtedly,
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, I firmly believe that the
health
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and
education
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sectors
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should be prioritized more than others.
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  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
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  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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