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Today, more and more people use robots to do tasks at home and at work. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Why?

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Nowadays, people are having a hard time reaching
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 on whether
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robots
 to do
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housework
houseworks
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housework
 and some activities. From my point of view,
robots
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is
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 a positive development. To be sure, the
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 of
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automation
automations
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automation
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 more merits rather than problems. For one thing, non-humans employees can be employed in most places where is dangerous for humans . As a matter of fact, in some developed countries like
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China, few companies operate much more nonhuman workers which
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 been able to programmable to do
such
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 activities
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 toxic elements. For another,
Robots
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essential aid to elder people who have serious deceases. Undeniable, these days more and more doctors give
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advise
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for
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 old patients who live alone to purchase a robot which
have
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 a function
such
 as
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remaining
remainding
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remaining
reminding
 to have a pill on time. There is no doubt that
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 caused more issues than advantages. It is undeniable that
robots
 are mechanisms
therefore
, they will be broken during their work time.
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, if they do something wrong at work ,
another
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robots
 will break too or explore in
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 field. In
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 analysis, despite the fact that automatic
technologies
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is
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 a popular new trend when it assists
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elders and
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 some harmful jobs for humans, even it manages to create some troubles. For
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 reason, I am convinced that robot employees
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 a positive development in general.
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