Recent developments in technology have made the T.V screen so live that people not need to go for any live performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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makes a feel like we are actually part of the audience even though we're in different locations.

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Recent developments in technology have made the T.V screen so live that people not need to go for any live performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Around the world, rural people are moving to cities and urban areas, so populations in the countryside are decreasing. Do you think that this is a positive or negative development?

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