Recent developments in technology have made the T.V screen so live that people not need to go for any live performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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live function which gives many people an

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live performance without being at the actual location.

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is the cameras that memorize everything and send it to our

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, we can get a similar experience as the audience at the live performance. A related point is the abilities of

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while the shows are live so people who missed it in some part can reverse and repeat the tape again.

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performance. In conclusion,

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a variety of function which support people who aren't able to enjoy the whole

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makes a feel like we are actually part of the audience even though we're in different locations.

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