Recent developments in technology have made the T.V screen so live that people not need to go for any live performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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while the shows are live so people who missed it in some part can reverse and repeat the tape again.

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makes a feel like we are actually part of the audience even though we're in different locations.

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Recent developments in technology have made the T.V screen so live that people not need to go for any live performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Fully explain your ideas

In some schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts subjects (e.g. literature, history), and boys tend to choose science subjects (e.g. physics, mathematics). Why do you think this is so? Should this tendency be changed?

The world of work is rapidly changing and employees cannot depend on having the same job or the same working conditions for life. Why is it the case? Can you suggest some ways to prepare people to work in the future?

Some think that residents should responsible for keeping their areas clean and tidy, while others say it is the government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

Some people believe that newspapers are the best way to read the news. others, however, think that websites are better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The tabel below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relev