Recent developments in technology have made the T.V screen so live that people not need to go for any live performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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live function which gives many people an

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while the shows are live so people who missed it in some part can reverse and repeat the tape again.

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makes a feel like we are actually part of the audience even though we're in different locations.

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Recent developments in technology have made the T.V screen so live that people not need to go for any live performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Fully explain your ideas

Some people believe that the difference between the lowest paid job and the highest paid jobs should be reduced. What extent do you agree?

83.The movement of people from agricultural areas to cities to work can cause serious problems in both places. What are the serious problems? What measures can be used to solve these problems?

Nowadays, people of all ages from certain parts of the world spend most time at home rather than going outdoors. Discuss the reasons, is this negative or positive development.

Last Wednesday you flew from London to Vancouver. When you arrived home, you discovered that you had left your hand luggage on the plane. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter, you should explain: where and when you lost your bag what your bag looks like what its contents were