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Many people believe that it is easier to have a healthy lifestyles in the countryside. other believe that there are health benefits of living in cities. discuss both view and give your opinion.

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 some put forward the view that having healthier life is possible in the metropolises, I am of the opinion that there
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 more advantages in case of the health
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 those individuals living in the villages. It is said that well-being of the society in
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large cities is better.
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 to say, the metropolis has more options and needed methods to cure
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diseases.
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, remedies are more available to citizens in comparison with those who live out of
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town and when you have
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a life-threating
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threating
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threatening
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situations
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such
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 attack or panic attack the member of the family can easily and constantly find a pharmacy in close proximity to their homeplace and tackle
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 problem.
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 people in the city keep themselves safe and prevent even
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fatal outcome. I,
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, would claim that to have
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 lifestyle for those who live in the villages is
increadibly
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incredibly
 uncomplicated. What I mean is,
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the community
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community
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communities
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 in
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large cities
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 facing
torubles
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troubles
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mental
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mental
 health. In Almaty,
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,
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 of the major problems is traffic
congestions
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 which
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 a great amount of people headaches and stress, and the rate
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anxiety is
visiuably
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visibly
visually
 higher in the urban zones than in the residential areas.
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, it is peaceful and much
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 home far away from
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industrialized
industrialised
industirialized
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industrialised
 places. In conclusion, despite the fact that some find more pros for the well-being in the big cities due to the ease of the
selfcare
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self-care
self care
, I would maintain that residing in the villages is way more attractive and preferable in order to be more positive and stable every day.
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