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some people say that the main enviromental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems

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our world is so beautiful. Yet so fragile. And there are so many environmental problems that make the earth more and more wrecked. And for 2 reasons I think that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular
species
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 of plants and
animals
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. from my point of view, the
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 and most important reason is great to deal of
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 have become extinct and it affected the food chain, because of human creations . Humans have invented a lot of
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, which include totally safe inventions to much more harmful ones. and that harmful
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 affected our environment, and destroyed
animals
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' habitats as well as ours. Not only
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 ' habitats
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 polluted and were the reason for some
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' extinction The
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 reason why the loss of particular
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 of
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 and plants is the main environmental problem of our time is deforestation is growing day by day and plants and trees are no longer able to clean the polluted air.
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 making people get illnesses and lung diseases so if we don'
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 do something about it our younger generation have to deal with
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 problem and I don'
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 think
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 a good idea. So in conclusion, we 'humans' made
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 worse and if we don'
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 correct and prevent more possible dangers that are waiting for us to do the wrong step it might be too late for us to do anything
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 totally our worst nightmare, and it all started with the extinction of one or two
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 that we didn'
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 even care to kill. It became worse and in the blink of an eye, we killed a lot of living
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 and which made our environment get weaker, ready to vanish. We live on earth so we have to save it from extinction
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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